Feedback and editing
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rainwolf's suggestion, I went back and added a few lines near the beginning to indicate that Salvatore was pretty much always drunk. It's subtle, but important. He has to be seen as a drunkard in order for the plot to work the way it should. I also need to add a few lines to several combat scenes, highlighting his overconfidence/death wish. There are one or two spots where he shouldn't head for the door at all; he should continue fighting as his men drag him out. A subtle change, but an important one. Then I need to put in something in the battle with the bats, showing up how much that has changed.
I'm not really writing tonight. I don't want to get into a scene, only to give the computer over to Piet in fifteen minutes. And I have real, paid work to do tomorrow. Any renumeration from my book is still quite a ways in the future.
I have a week and a half before my report cards are due in first draft, and I have about eight hours' worth of marking to do before I can write a lot of it. I can do comments tomorrow, and enter marks for a few subjects, but that's about it. Fortunately, once stuff is marked and the comments are written, reports are a snap. It's just a matter of cutting and pasting.
I'm starting to consider the possibility of a prequel, set in the homesea of the Dreamcarver. There would be a lot more freedom to it, because that world isn't in any of the Ironclaw books. I could create most of the world myself. That would, of course, take a lot more work. But I know the ending already, and the bare-bones of the plot. It's the rest that would need to be fleshed out.
Gotta go. Piet's turn.
rainwolf's suggestion, I went back and added a few lines near the beginning to indicate that Salvatore was pretty much always drunk. It's subtle, but important. He has to be seen as a drunkard in order for the plot to work the way it should. I also need to add a few lines to several combat scenes, highlighting his overconfidence/death wish. There are one or two spots where he shouldn't head for the door at all; he should continue fighting as his men drag him out. A subtle change, but an important one. Then I need to put in something in the battle with the bats, showing up how much that has changed.I'm not really writing tonight. I don't want to get into a scene, only to give the computer over to Piet in fifteen minutes. And I have real, paid work to do tomorrow. Any renumeration from my book is still quite a ways in the future.
I have a week and a half before my report cards are due in first draft, and I have about eight hours' worth of marking to do before I can write a lot of it. I can do comments tomorrow, and enter marks for a few subjects, but that's about it. Fortunately, once stuff is marked and the comments are written, reports are a snap. It's just a matter of cutting and pasting.
I'm starting to consider the possibility of a prequel, set in the homesea of the Dreamcarver. There would be a lot more freedom to it, because that world isn't in any of the Ironclaw books. I could create most of the world myself. That would, of course, take a lot more work. But I know the ending already, and the bare-bones of the plot. It's the rest that would need to be fleshed out.
Gotta go. Piet's turn.